![]() His eyes lost interest when she entered the kitchen, her wistful expression a reminder of an indiscretion, a mistake she'd called it. She began to speak, just his name. Joe. He raised a hand. Her grin evaporated. In silence, she placed a scarf over her head, knotted it under her chin, and quietly left. His heart winced. *** She winced when he caught her staring at him from across the cafe. Her face reddened. An expression of guilt? Hands in her lap, she wistfully rotated the diamond. She wondered which was the mistake, thinking about being with a stranger, or remaining in a loveless marriage. She paid the bill, flipped her scarf around her neck, and left without a word. Her husband would be worried. .*** She had loved him since before she knew him. In the motel, lying next to his spent body, a satisfied smile on his face, his wrists captured by silk scarves, she opened the drawer and reached inside. His mistake was to take her for granted. She raised up and placed a wistful kiss on his lips. He winced at the touch of the knife's point. His expression changed as the blade pierced his chest. So did hers. CommentsColleen Burnham 12/24/2010 08:37
Jim - I like it as a three-part motif, allowing the reader to learn more about "her" with each scene change :-) cjb
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01/06/2011 13:22
I put this on my list a LONG time ago. I'm glad I finally made it here. Nice rendering.
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01/23/2011 09:31
I winced involuntarily three times in reaction to your triptych of subdued horror.
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Cezarija Abartis 05/24/2011 15:39
Each one is surprising and yet related. Well-done.
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